I've been doing some re-reading and I've realized a couple of adjustments are in line. When I first mentioned the White City, I had no idea it was going to become what it has, and now that is has...er...become...you know... :p There's a deatil অথবা two that don't make any sense now, so I've fixed them.
They be:
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Where it read:
"The Sensei says that there is an increase in activity of Dark creatures in and around the city. So far there have been no direct attacks on anyone, though there are reports of people's pets going missing. That's not surprising, considering three নেকড়ে-মানুষ were sighted in the Garland District on Friday night. Two of them are believed to be associates of Loki's Son." Brandon sits back and Snape folds his hands on the table. "Also, the Sensei says that two Knights of Walpurgis attempted to enter the city Saturday night, but they were met দ্বারা বন্ধু of Mr. Everest and turned aside. The Sensei does not believe the Knights will attempt again any time soon. The good news there is that no one was killed."
It now reads:
"The Sensei says that there is an increase in activity of Dark creatures in and around the Muggle village. So far there have been no direct attacks on anyone, though there are reports of people's pets going missing. That's not surprising, considering three নেকড়ে-মানুষ were sighted in the Old Quarter on Friday night. Two of them are believed to be associates of Hróðvitnir." Brandon sits back and Snape folds his hands on the table. "Also, the Sensei says that two Knights of Walpurgis attempted to enter the village Saturday night, but they were met দ্বারা বন্ধু of Mr. Everest and turned aside. The Sensei does not believe the Knights will attempt again any time soon. The good news there is that no one was killed."
Note:
'Hróðvitnir' is one of the many names of Fenrir, the monsterous wolf-son of Loki; in Old Norse it means "fame wolf". I made this change because I didn't want anyone to get the wrong idea about Severus' little Familiar. Well, one of the reasons, anyway.
link has been adjusted to reflect the changes:
Where it read:
"There has been an increase in Dark activity in and around the city," says Snape. "Friday night, three নেকড়ে-মানুষ were sighted in the Garland District, two of which may be associates of Fenrir Greyback." There is a hiss from Phineas Nigellus Black, and Snape sees several of the Headmasters' portraits either close their eyes অথবা shake their heads. "Also," he leans অগ্রবর্তী on the ডেস্ক in front of him, "Saturday night two Death Eaters attempted to enter the city, but were prevented from doing so by..." he pauses and looks at Dumbledore, "friends of Mr. Everest." The Elder wizard's face lights up and he chuckles. "Well, that is news indeed, good news."
It now reads:
"There has been an increase in Dark activity in and around the Muggle village," says Snape. "Friday night, three নেকড়ে-মানুষ were sighted in the Old Quarter, two of which may be associates of Fenrir Greyback." There is a hiss from Phineas Nigellus Black, and Snape sees several of the Headmasters' portraits either close their eyes অথবা shake their heads. "Also," he leans অগ্রবর্তী on the ডেস্ক in front of him, "Saturday night two Death Eaters attempted to enter the village, but were prevented from doing so by..." he pauses and looks at Dumbledore, "friends of Mr. Everest." The Elder wizard's face lights up and he chuckles. "Well, that is news indeed, good news."
If there's any আরো edits necessary, I'll make another post like this.
Also...some kind words to me a little while back have made me consider publishing this elsewhere so it has a wider readership. If I decide to do that, it would be after the story has concluded. :-)
They be:
link
Where it read:
"The Sensei says that there is an increase in activity of Dark creatures in and around the city. So far there have been no direct attacks on anyone, though there are reports of people's pets going missing. That's not surprising, considering three নেকড়ে-মানুষ were sighted in the Garland District on Friday night. Two of them are believed to be associates of Loki's Son." Brandon sits back and Snape folds his hands on the table. "Also, the Sensei says that two Knights of Walpurgis attempted to enter the city Saturday night, but they were met দ্বারা বন্ধু of Mr. Everest and turned aside. The Sensei does not believe the Knights will attempt again any time soon. The good news there is that no one was killed."
It now reads:
"The Sensei says that there is an increase in activity of Dark creatures in and around the Muggle village. So far there have been no direct attacks on anyone, though there are reports of people's pets going missing. That's not surprising, considering three নেকড়ে-মানুষ were sighted in the Old Quarter on Friday night. Two of them are believed to be associates of Hróðvitnir." Brandon sits back and Snape folds his hands on the table. "Also, the Sensei says that two Knights of Walpurgis attempted to enter the village Saturday night, but they were met দ্বারা বন্ধু of Mr. Everest and turned aside. The Sensei does not believe the Knights will attempt again any time soon. The good news there is that no one was killed."
Note:
'Hróðvitnir' is one of the many names of Fenrir, the monsterous wolf-son of Loki; in Old Norse it means "fame wolf". I made this change because I didn't want anyone to get the wrong idea about Severus' little Familiar. Well, one of the reasons, anyway.
link has been adjusted to reflect the changes:
Where it read:
"There has been an increase in Dark activity in and around the city," says Snape. "Friday night, three নেকড়ে-মানুষ were sighted in the Garland District, two of which may be associates of Fenrir Greyback." There is a hiss from Phineas Nigellus Black, and Snape sees several of the Headmasters' portraits either close their eyes অথবা shake their heads. "Also," he leans অগ্রবর্তী on the ডেস্ক in front of him, "Saturday night two Death Eaters attempted to enter the city, but were prevented from doing so by..." he pauses and looks at Dumbledore, "friends of Mr. Everest." The Elder wizard's face lights up and he chuckles. "Well, that is news indeed, good news."
It now reads:
"There has been an increase in Dark activity in and around the Muggle village," says Snape. "Friday night, three নেকড়ে-মানুষ were sighted in the Old Quarter, two of which may be associates of Fenrir Greyback." There is a hiss from Phineas Nigellus Black, and Snape sees several of the Headmasters' portraits either close their eyes অথবা shake their heads. "Also," he leans অগ্রবর্তী on the ডেস্ক in front of him, "Saturday night two Death Eaters attempted to enter the village, but were prevented from doing so by..." he pauses and looks at Dumbledore, "friends of Mr. Everest." The Elder wizard's face lights up and he chuckles. "Well, that is news indeed, good news."
If there's any আরো edits necessary, I'll make another post like this.
Also...some kind words to me a little while back have made me consider publishing this elsewhere so it has a wider readership. If I decide to do that, it would be after the story has concluded. :-)