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posted by para-scence
If someone wouldn't mind পাঠ করা and commenting, I'm kind of in need of feedback. Thanks in advance.

"Evangeline! It's time to get up!" Mom called from the hallway. I grumbled and pulled the blanket over my head. Just five আরো minutes... five আরো hours would be nice...

"Evan," my older brother Joshua poked his head into my room. "Didn't আপনি hear Mom? আপনি need to get up." I growled at him.

"Get out," I squeezed my eyes shut tighter.

"Why don't আপনি try and make me?" he taunted. I grabbed my বালিশ and flung it across the room at him. He laughed and ran out of the room. Not having anything to rest my head on now, I got out of বিছানা and got dressed. I got downstairs just before Mom was about to explode again.

"Why must আপনি stay up so late?" Mom complained. "Maybe if আপনি didn't, it'd be easier to get up in the morning." I grabbed an আপেল out of the basket on the island and shrugged.

"Sorry, Mom. I'm a teenager."

"So that means আপনি make stupid decisions?" Joshua asked, already to go to school, with twenty মিনিট to spare. I narrowed my eyebrows at him.

"What about you?" I questioned.

"I'm turning eighteen in less than two months. I'm basically an adult now," he countered. I rolled my eyes at him at sat at the table. My twelve বছর old sister, Sophia, smiled at me from across the table.

"What's he going on about now?" she signed to me. I gave her an exasperated look.

"Same old, same old," I signed back to her, mouthing the words. "He thinks he's such a big shot." Sophia rolled her eyes and nodded.

"I saw that," Joshua stated. He went to the living room. I flipped him off as his back was turned. Sophia laughed. "Y'know you're gonna be late, Evan, if আপনি don't hurry up." I stuck my tongue out at him, then quickly ran upstairs to brush my teeth and hair. I had about two মিনিট left দ্বারা the time I was putting on my socks and shoes. "Evan! Hurry up!" Joshua called from downstairs. "Or else I'm leaving without you!" I gave up on tying my shoes, grabbed my bag, and ran down the stairs. I got to Joshua's car just before he was about to ditch me."You know, পরবর্তি বছর you're not going to have me to drive আপনি to school. You'll have to take the bus, which as আপনি know, comes a half ঘন্টা earlier."

"Oh, please, you'll still give me rides.. It's not like you'll have anything better to do."

"Um, college?" he reminded me. "Remember? I'm not gonna be home." I bit my tongue, but tried to appear unemotional on the outside.

"You really think Bailey's okay with আপনি leaving?" I asked. "She's the best thing that ever happened to you, and you're just gonna leave her?"

"I'm not leaving her," Joshua snapped. "We talked about this... I'm going out of state for just a couple years... We'll visit each other. Then once I graduate, I'll come back and we'll be together." I folded my arms and stared out the window.

"Sure."

***

I ditched Joshua at his car once we got to school and headed to my locker. There, I met up with Brynn and Camden. Brynn was leaning against the locker পরবর্তি to mine, a nearly dead look on her face.

"What's your problem?" I furrowed my eyebrows.

"Wait for it..." she muttered.

"Evan!" Samara's voice shrieked from down the hall.

"Brace yourself," Brynn grumbled under her breath. Samara slammed into me; I nearly fell into my locker. Her attack soon turned into a hug as she excitedly jumped up and down, squealing with joy.

"OhmyGod! Guess what?!" she trilled.

"What?" I asked, a little worried.

"I got my license!" she shouted.

"Oh really, that's so cool!" I grinned. I looked back at Brynn. "So what's your problem?"

"Try having to listen to her go on and on about it the whole ride to school..." she sighed. Samara rolled her eyes, unphased দ্বারা Brynn's তিক্ত response.

"Oh, she gave আপনি a ride to school?" I asked. Brynn nodded, and pretended to twirl a small flag.

"Yay me..."

"Yeah, I would've picked আপনি up too, Evan, but আপনি kinda live out of the way, and I know Joshua gives আপনি a ride---"

"It's okay," I nodded. Something about Brynn's morbid attitude told me I would've not wanted to deal with Samara's perkiness this morning. Usually Brynn's not like this until after her math class.

"So, how about we go somewhere fun tonight?" Camden suggested. "Now that Samara's got her license, we can go have some fun!"

"Don't আপনি need an adult with আপনি for the first year?" I asked. Samara rolled her eyes.

"Oh please, Evan. No one follows that rule. Besides, I'm a great driver! Right, Brynn?"

"No comment," Brynn replied.

"I guess that sounds like fun," I shrugged.

"Yeah! We can go downtown and see a movie, অথবা something!" Camden decided. We all nodded in agreement. The warning ঘণ্টা rang. I turned to head to class, when someone ran over my foot.

"Ow! Dammit!" I jumped out of the way too late. It was Destery, the school loser and nerd. He's in a wheelchair, which isn't the reason I hate him. He's just so damn annoying when he runs your গাধা over.

"Sorry!" he called. "I'm gonna be late!" He rolled down the hallway, barreling through other kids' paths. I clenched and unclenched my toes inside my converse. Damn, that hurt!

"You okay?" Samara asked. "That kid needs to watch where he's going."

"What that kid needs to get a life," Brynn shook her head. "God, he's such a nerd! He's always correcting Mr. Thorsen in History, like he lived it অথবা something. He's so damn annoying. Maybe if he put down the frickin' encyclopedia and made some friends--"

"But who would want to be বন্ধু with him?" Samara reminded her.

"True," Brynn shrugged.

"Come on," Camden smiled. "We're gonna be late." We all left and went our separate ways to class.

***

I sat on the ঘোমটা of Joshua's car, grumbling impatiently. School had gotten out almost ten মিনিট ago, and yet he still hadn't shown up. If I'd known he was going to take this long, I would've just gotten a ride with Samara and Brynn. Finally, after what seemed like forever, he showed up.

"Okay, you're always giving me crap about being late to stuff," I called out to him as he got closer. "Yet look at you. What the hell took আপনি so long?" He unlocked the ট্রাঙ্ক and threw in his backpack, then headed back to the driver's door.

"I was working in the tutoring center fourth block. Miranda needed my help... And get off the car," he sighed, exasperated. I hopped off the ঘোমটা and got into the passenger's side. "Any plans for tonight?" Joshua asked casually. "Like studying for your math test?" I glared at him. My algebra teacher, Mrs. Waller, also teaches his AP Calculus class. He's such a nerd and always has to try and keep tabs on me when he can.

"I studied during lunch," I lied. "I'm fine. I'm going out with my বন্ধু tonight, which আপনি should start doing more."

"I'm going to be graduating this year, Evan. I need to keep my grades up." Please. He's a freaking genius. Joshua sighed. "So what're আপনি guys doing tonight?"

"We're going downtown to see a movie," I replied. "Samara got her license."

"Oh, that's cool. One of her parents is going to be there, right?"

"Yeah...?" I tried to play it cool. "Isn't that the law?" He smiled and nodded.

"Just checkin', sis."

When I got home, instead of doing my homework, I threw my bag into my room. I'm sure I'll have enough time tomorrow to do it. If not... Oh well. I collapsed onto my bed, deciding to take a little nap. Before I could doze off, though, I heard Sophia come in. She frowned at me and sat in the শিম bag chair in the corner of my room. I rolled onto my side.

"How was school?" I signed.

"It sucked! I hated it!" she signed back. "Why did Mom and Dad have to put me in public school? I want to go back to my old school!"

"They want আপনি to be able to have আরো friends. And it's only been a few months."

"I know! But the other kids still make fun of me! They don't know I can read lips." I sat up in bed, and patted the আসন পরবর্তি to me. She got up and sat there.

"Just don't listen to them," I signed to her. She raised an eyebrow at me like, Really? I rolled my eyes. "You know what I mean." At least that got her to smile. "You're way শীতল than any of the other kids. They just want to make আপনি feel bad. Don't worry, someone will notice how special and sweet আপনি are, and they'll want to be বন্ধু with you. Because আপনি are awesome." I tapped her heart.

"Thanks, Evan," she signed. She had a sheepish smile across her face.

"Anytime." She stood up and hugged me, then left. A few মিনিট later, I could feel the খাদ from her room shaking the floor. Mom and Dad had her room sound-proofed so she could play her সঙ্গীত as loud as she wanted. I couldn't hear it, but I could still feel it slightly. She likes being able to feel the music. Her taste is a bit much for me.

We didn't end up eating till almost 7, when Samara was supposed to pick me up. I quickly gulped down my food.

"Geez, slow down, Evangeline!" Mom scolded me. "You're going to make yourself sick!"

"In a hurry somewhere?" Dad asked.

"I'm going out tonight," I replied."We're going to the movies."

"Samara got her license," Joshua added. I clenched my fork. Somehow I wasn't sure how this would go over with Mom and Dad.

"Good for her," Dad grinned. "There's going to be an adult there though, right?"

"Yes," I ব্যক্ত uneasily. Thankfully, Mom and Dad didn't notice. My cellphone buzzed. It was from Brynn: Hurry up! "I gotta go," I ব্যক্ত quickly. I put my dishes in the sink, grabbed my jacket, and ran out the front door.

"Be safe!" I could barely hear Mom call after me.

I got into the backseat with Brynn, with Camden in the front আসন পরবর্তি to Samara. Samara turned around and grinned at me.

"Ready? This is going to be so much fun!" she squealed. She carefully pulled away from the curb then zoomed down the street.

"Samara, be careful!" I warned. "My parents think your parents are with us! That's gonna be hard to believe if আপনি destroy the neighborhood!"

"Oh, relax, Evan! I'm a great driver!" Samara rolled her eyes at me in the rearview mirror. I sighed and leaned back in my seat.

"Hey, maybe we could go pick up some guys," Brynn laughed.

"Gee, what am I?" Camden remarked.

"Like maybe Mason?" She eyed me, a devilish grin on her face. I rolled my eyes.

"Shut up. I don't like him anymore." I looked out the window, so she wouldn't see my cheeks turn pink. It was true though. I didn't like him anymore... At least not as much as I used to. Brynn laughed, but fortunately dropped the subject. We drove for about twenty minutes, getting closer to the edge of town. Just as we were about to pull onto the highway, Samara slammed on the brakes. My hands shot out in front of me, bracing myself. Brynn, however, had fallen asleep, and collided with the front seat. She fell back in her seat, now fully awake.

"What the fuck, man!" she screamed. "What the hell was that?!" We watched as the man on the motorcycle sped away, thankfully unharmed.

"Geez! Didn't he see us?" Camden retorted. We looked to Samara, who looked like she'd just seen a ghost. "Samara. আপনি okay?"

"...Yeah," she shook herself awake.She carefully pulled out onto the highway. Brynn rolled her eyes and tried to go back to sleep. Camden looked back at me and laughed.

"Damn, that was close," he chuckled.

"Shut up, Camden," Samara griped. "Ugh, I hate driving on the highway... People are such dumbasses." We drove on the highway, carefully, for about a half hour, until we got into downtown. We drove around the parking lot of the movie theatre for a while, until we found a spot. Samara ran over the curb as she pulled into the spot, but it didn't do any damage. Brynn clapped her hands.

"Brilliant," she ব্যক্ত darkly. "Excellent job, Samara." Samara sighed and pulled off the curb.

"Shut up," she grumbled. "I bet I drive better than you!"

"I never ব্যক্ত আপনি didn't," Brynn shrugged. "Why do আপনি think I don't have my license?" We all got out and headed inside. Tonight's showing: The Woman In Black.

***

After the movie was over, we all ran out back to Samara's car. I got into the passenger seat, while Camden took my seat.

"That was awesome!" Camden hollered. "It was so scary!"

"No it wasn't," Brynn disagreed incredulously. We ignored her. Samara backed out of the parking spot. "Careful, careful, careful, careful," Brynn repeated over and over in a monotone. "Samara! Watch out for that child!" Samara stopped to turn around and glare at her.

"Brynn! Shut up!" she shouted at her. "You're making me nervous!" Brynn grinned.

"This was fun," Camden said. "Next time we should go into the city অথবা something." I un-clicked my seat-belt to turn around to talk to him. The whole night was lit up with neon signs, and probably thousands of other cars' headlights. We smoothly pulled out onto the highway, backed up in traffic.

"Ugh, we're never gonna get home!" Samara grumbled. As we came to an intersection, we waited for our chance to go. We watched as car after car passed us, leaving us no chance to turn onto the main road. Cars behind us started honking. Brynn flipped them off through the rear window. I leaned my cheek against the head rest of my আসন and shook my head at Camden. This was going to take forever...

"Samara, can't আপনি just go?" Camden asked impatiently. "People are starting to get real pissed off. Samara gripped the wheel, looking almost sick.

"I'm trying!" she ব্যক্ত through her teeth. "They're not letting me through!" Finally there was a break in the cars speeding past us.

"Just go!" Brynn shouted anxiously. Samara floored it on the gas and pulled out.

"Samara! Watch out!" Camden screamed. I looked out my window as a blinding light made me freeze. I didn't even have time to scream. The sound of the impact was deafening. The crunching metal and shattering glass pierced my eardrums. I felt the car flip over, and over, and over. The small fragments of glass licked tiny cuts all over me. I couldn't see anything. I felt the wind flying past me, and I knew I was no longer in the car. My body slammed onto the cold, wet pavement, and slide across. My first thought was get out of the road! But I couldn't move. I could taste blood in my mouth. I laid there, sore and motionless on the road, as the beat up, metal scrap of what was left of the car barreled towards me.

I closed my eyes.
added by h3rmioneg
Chapter 4: My Stuff is Off-Limits So Hands Off

      James Rivers flipped over boxes searching for that one book. This book shouldn't have been this difficult to find. How could it disappear? No one knows about it but his wife and him. He knew his wife didnt want to gi near it lr the attic. He was positive Simone অথবা Brooke didn't come near the attic in the past week. They didn't know that he was alway watching their every move. A concerned parent was how he thought of himself. He was sure they would never do such a thing even when he told them about the attic. He surveyed the entire room....
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added by alicia386
When I'm with you
I feel like the world has melted away
Like there's nothing but you
The power's প্রদর্শিত হচ্ছে between us

I'm always speechless when I'm with you
But sometimes the silence is worth more
Can আপনি feel the eyes lock?
It's like the whole world has gone

We are the only ones
In this sweet endless heaven
And I always want to keep enjoying it
দিন দ্বারা day

When I'm with you
There's nothing else আপনি can do
We are the only ones who have this secret bond
বছর দ্বারা year

We're হারিয়ে গেছে in this world
This deep, sweet large world
Where people from each country come to love
We're হারিয়ে গেছে in this world...forever
added by alicia386
She has some helpful tips on how to get your book rolling.
video
বই
how to
your বই
লেখা
storytelling
entertainment
(sorry its taken SOO long for part 6!)
More days passed. Kyle didn't improve, he didn't wake, he didn't unimprove, he just layed there. His breath was slow and hard. His body would sometimes move, not a lot but it did. His head shaked against the pilow, sweat dripped from his body. বন্ধু would visit Kyle after school, to see that he was going well, the they'd leave and it would be silent, with only sobs and little beeps from the হৃদয় moniter. Just like the দিন Kyle was found, only then there was আরো hope and James didnt cry that time, he'd forced the tears inside. This time James sobbed,...
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As weeks passed the doctors had put Kyle on life support as he was getting worse. They were all there when Kyle woke up. "Kyle!" ব্যক্ত Summer she sat পরবর্তি to his বিছানা and hugged him tightly. He squeezed her back, it wasn't very hard, but he tried. "you cant leave me!" she demanded "You CAN'T!" she cried and cried and cried, but she didn't let go. "I'm sorry" he whispred
"No! Youre NOT going! আপনি can't! I প্রণয় you! How am I supposed to-" she stopped and cried, she let go and went to her seat. Angus put his hand on James back, gestering for him to talk to Kyle. He knelt beside him. Kyle saw all...
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posted by vampirefreak_26
When 9 o’clock began to come closer I was wandering from my closet to my bed. Should I go অথবা should I just stay home? Why would I want to go, I don’t know anybody there, right? I don’t even know what to wear! Stupid thoughts, I knew very well why I wanted to go and it could be summed up in just one word, Gabriel. I wanted to see him and every time I did it became harder for me to resist him. Even if I wanted to which I didn’t, I don’t think I would be able to not notice him. The guy had a great body and those eyes of his! They seemed to be glowing, calling to আপনি to come closer and...
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Prologue: The Breakout

The dark figure moved quickly, careful to keep hidden from the surveillance cameras.

It was dressed in black robes, obscuring its face and features. Carefully, it navigated its way through the tall shrubs, keeping out of sight.

Tonight is the night, it thought menacingly as it ducked low behind a dirigible বরই tree.

Tonight he would finally have revenge, sweet revenge against the blasted Culturians. Revenge against the blasted protagonists who bathed in victory and revenge against those who imprisoned the defeated.

It had only two things on it's mind: revenge and dominance....
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posted by Problematic129
Chapter 24
    Trapped in a deadly game
    It was bizarre, it had about everyone I knew and learned from the visions, but I couldn’t rush in, we had to go one at a time. Although it was form Dorothy’s point of view.    
    The first page was brief, it basically explained it was Dorothy’s sort of diary, and she’d put some key notes and thoughts in it two. When we flipped to the other page it was of me, it took two whole pages. One page a picture of me smiling brightly at the camera, obviously young, and the...
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30 hours. That's how long I had to live. The doctors had warned me that this দিন would come about 3 years ago. But I didn't believe them. They've ব্যক্ত it before, several times in the last 3 months, and yet it never did happen. But this time, everything was real. Reality had fianlly hit me. I was going to die. That was it. That was the last time I would ever doubt myself again. People surrounded the outside of my hospital room. But no, not my dad. He could care less. I'm only 17, geez Dad. The least আপনি could have done was call me অথবা send me an যন্ত্রপত্র অথবা something. But I didn't know until last...
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posted by alicia386
Crime

Chapter 5: Who ব্যক্ত I Wanted to be Apart of This

      Two days later, Marco kept his promise to Jason. He ব্যক্ত he wouldn't say a word to the girls. He wouldn't mention anything about Sammy অথবা D.B.E. He never ব্যক্ত he wouldn't let them figure it out. It was hard on him to see Faye so clueless about the real world. If he didn't help her now, who knows what would happen to her and her friends.
      Simone's plan worked perfectly. Part one was to make Mr. Stone have a stomach ache. It was gross to hear when he was in the bathroom and then it was awful to smell once he came out. Then his...
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posted by SweetHoneyBunny
Trudging along behind his group, Talow scuffed his worn boots against the packed trail leading away from his home. He had been প্রদত্ত a uniform, a flame gun and a sharp looking sword of his own; including a brief crash test on how to use them. He was at the back of the line, followed only দ্বারা the line of prisoners taken captive দ্বারা the troops.
“I am so sorry, I didn't expect them to do that.” Talow ব্যক্ত to one man at the front of the captive line. He was referring to earlier in the দিন when the prisoners had asked to stop and rest, they had been greeted with the captain of the troop ordering...
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posted by SweetHoneyBunny
The first rays of sun beat down on the scarred land, baking and scorching the already dry soil. Small clumps of crops grew here and there where there was enough to hold onto. From the small village, a scrawny rooster could be heard announcing the morning as people left the shelter of their huts, thanking whoever had let them survive another night.

Talow was like any other fifteen বছর old that was still alive and not recruited. He worked on the farm, if আপনি could call it that, picking the weeds and making sure the village would have food. Shoving himself off the thin blankets, Talow got ready...
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posted by 1999jacko
Alli was picke up and driven to hospital straight away blood still gushing from her face and arms, the tears mixed in with blood making her wounds stung even more. Then after a few hours of stitches, antibiotics bein pumped into her wounds andalusia tr blood being cleaned and scrubbed off her body, she finally lay in বিছানা with no one around to comfort her but the silly nurses who try and cheer her up a bit but failing miserably. All of Alli's wounds were stinging and aching to the point where she could hardly সরানো to reach her IPad, she slowly gave up and decided to just lay there and wait for...
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posted by alicia386
August 10

      Shea Wainwright was one of the many girls who screamed when they learned of the appearance of Derek Tonkin. He wasn't coming until পরবর্তি week but Shea couldn't wait. She could finally claim that she dated a rock star. It was so obvious that he was going to end up dating her. She was the most জনপ্রিয় girl in school. Why wouldn't a rock তারকা choose her as his girlfriend. She entered the lunchroom with her fingers interlocked with Eric.
      As usual, everyone was in their own group. The jocks were flirting with the cheerleaders while the nerds kept themselves on the outskirts...
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posted by Annanonymous
........ Kairtlyn sighed. Normally she would get eighteen coins this দিন from selling flowers, but she got two today. She picked her ফুল basket. Nobody in Sderina would want ফুলেরডালি now. They are celebrating the Dutchess Maira's birthday. As she walked, two guards pointed a her.

"She's the Duke's daughter!" one of them shouted. The guards began to chase her. She ran away, and slipped....
(literally 80 মিনিট later...)

"There she was!" one of the guards said. She had fainted, and she was opening her eyes....
"What are আপনি doing with me?!" she shouted.
"We want আপনি to live at the Duke's castle......"

(To Be Continued.)
posted by Problematic129
Chapter 23
    The difference between
    I always knew being rich made আপনি poorer, for one, you’d most likely put your things first before anything else, but some people manage to keep compassion. My family was never rich rich, but we still had many luxuries, but they never helped our family.
    But not being rich doesn’t mean আপনি get a good life either, because in the end, nothing’s perfect it’s just nice অথবা good. Families break up, বন্ধু betray, strangers steal, it’s just how the world works in some cases. We feel powerless...
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posted by SisterOfThalia
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This is my first full-length story that I've made.

আপনি know, I would post it here chapter দ্বারা chapter, but there's 23. And that would entirely cover up 'The Deadly Truth' (I know that should probably be underlined but my computer sucks and that isn't an option on here) chapters that are up thus far so I'm not doing that xD

Based off of the Percy Jackson series.

Note: This story kind of stinks, especially the first five chapters. Eve is a major Mary-Sue at the beginning, I think, but fanfiction.net won't let me change it so I can't really do much about it (plus I'm a sentimental weirdo who doesn't like to change things-- really gotta get over that). The সেকেন্ড story, which I'll post after I get feedback on this, is WAY better. I'm on chapter 14 of that and it's already longer than the first and দ্বারা FAR আরো descriptive and all. I blame myself for being younger when I started the first one :P
posted by E-Scope90
This song is about braking up with someone. Please যোগদান my club E-Scope90 if আপনি like it. I'll post some আরো if I get enough views.
Caysee
Oh Caysee
Casee, Caysee,
Can't আপনি see
Your প্রণয় isn't fit
For আপনি and me
Caysee, why won't আপনি understand
I don't want to take your hand
Oh
Caysee
Why can't আপনি find someone else,
Oh Caysee?
Caysee, don't feel so blue
আপনি can find a boy for you.
(repeat 2x)
Caysee, why cant আপনি see
You're just not the one for me.
Just please understand
Our প্রণয় isn't grand.
I don't wanna make a fit in front of the সঙ্গীত stand
Caysee
Can't আপনি see
You're not the one for me
Caysee, oh Caysee
Oh, can't আপনি see???!!!
আপনি can never be...
the one....
for me...