নমস্কার guys can আপনি help me with somthing???

I have the first chapter of a new possible story but I want to see if anybody is going to read it...
And I was wondering can আপনি guys read it and tell me what আপনি think in a মতামত অথবা email?
And I don't no the name yet so can আপনি guys help out with that to? Its not very long অথবা hard to read.Oh and I can give আপনি a link to it.

And there my other story mysterious প্রণয় আপনি can check out on the spot articles.