this is an English sonnet I had to write for my English class and I need to know if it is good অথবা not before I জমা করুন it, thank you. also the rhyme scheme is ababcdcdefefgg
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My dear প্রণয় আপনি once were a shining ray.
In my eyes আপনি meant the whole world to me.
Now everything about আপনি is a shade of gray.
Like your beauty, your emotions, and your প্রণয় is what I see.
However we must part onto our new paths.
Because our প্রণয় is coming to its new close.
রঙ were a beauty but now gray spreads its wrath.
I would প্রণয় to feel again but now it’s a ghost.
Our প্রণয় has left this earth for old times’ sake.
But when our প্রণয় left it took আপনি along too.
Sadly it left me with all this heartache.
Dying প্রণয় was something I wish I had clues to
If someone told me প্রণয় would never be easy
I would have chosen another path that’s breezy
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My dear প্রণয় আপনি once were a shining ray.
In my eyes আপনি meant the whole world to me.
Now everything about আপনি is a shade of gray.
Like your beauty, your emotions, and your প্রণয় is what I see.
However we must part onto our new paths.
Because our প্রণয় is coming to its new close.
রঙ were a beauty but now gray spreads its wrath.
I would প্রণয় to feel again but now it’s a ghost.
Our প্রণয় has left this earth for old times’ sake.
But when our প্রণয় left it took আপনি along too.
Sadly it left me with all this heartache.
Dying প্রণয় was something I wish I had clues to
If someone told me প্রণয় would never be easy
I would have chosen another path that’s breezy
looked in the mirror and saw that ugly girl
That girl that constantly reminded of who I was,
Of what I was.
I was a murder
People say My parents death wasn’t my fault
I killed them
I felt guilty
I felt ashamed
I was the one to blame
My life flashed before my eyes
I saw the fire, the crash
I saw the flames erupt inside me
I felt tears burn my eyelids
I felt it as much they did
They burned, I burned
I didn't want to be left alone
I never wanted them to leave
Though I was taken from them
They were also taken from me
Though they're gone,
We both pay the price
Death
And Scars.
That girl that constantly reminded of who I was,
Of what I was.
I was a murder
People say My parents death wasn’t my fault
I killed them
I felt guilty
I felt ashamed
I was the one to blame
My life flashed before my eyes
I saw the fire, the crash
I saw the flames erupt inside me
I felt tears burn my eyelids
I felt it as much they did
They burned, I burned
I didn't want to be left alone
I never wanted them to leave
Though I was taken from them
They were also taken from me
Though they're gone,
We both pay the price
Death
And Scars.
I wrote this about my (now ex) boyfriend, but still felt something about the poem, if not him. I'd প্রণয় some criticism on it (hopefully constructive) :).
Treacle dripping from our scars
Pooling on a jagged floor
আপনি are gone, still I know
From clustered trees and homemade vows
That we are one. And as আপনি lead
Your life of promise, graft and need
Know that we are one the same
Intertwined are হৃদয় at name.
আপনি may notice that only the সেকেন্ড verse rhymes, this is an attempt to প্রদর্শনী the idea of a one-sided relationship in its form in it's one-sided rhyme scheme. This is probably quite stupid- let me know.
Treacle dripping from our scars
Pooling on a jagged floor
আপনি are gone, still I know
From clustered trees and homemade vows
That we are one. And as আপনি lead
Your life of promise, graft and need
Know that we are one the same
Intertwined are হৃদয় at name.
আপনি may notice that only the সেকেন্ড verse rhymes, this is an attempt to প্রদর্শনী the idea of a one-sided relationship in its form in it's one-sided rhyme scheme. This is probably quite stupid- let me know.