Would আপনি read this?I want an honest opinion.

it sounds quite empty at the moment. আপনি may want to add little things in. If আপনি did put a twist to it, then it would be good. It all depends on how আপনি stretch it out without making it dull. আপনি need to put all of this into a 200+ page book. Maybe the brother won't detest Evie, but he'll tease her and he can't "suddenly stare into her eyes and realise with a shock that he was madly in প্রণয় with her" yeah, none of that. They have to gradually start to fall for each other. At first she could go back and find him very attractive then they'll tease each other and mess around and she'll start to fall for him, আপনি know what I'm saying?

Well, good luck it sounds like a good story. :)

Sure, it sounds like something I would read but it does sound like there wouldn't be a lot in it.
I completely agree with the person above.
আপনি will need the twist and no প্রণয় at first sight stuff- I find it really hard to be believable and it ruins the chemistry, meaning I feel none.
But other than that, it sounds very good!!
Good luck!!!!!! :D

i think there needs to be a BIG twist
i love those :D
something like ....once the girl relizes she loves him
he should get a girlfriend or something
so she tries to be like his lutty gf
and completly fails . and the guy wonders why shes acting like and ...well yeah..
....idk something big

but what do i know :/
im no writter x]
but i hope this helped trigger some ideas

Yes, especially if there's a twist in it. It sounds great, although I agree আপনি do need আরো to happen, that's why the twist is good. Maybe there should be an even bigger problem that makes everything worse?!

i would it sounds great to me :) im beening honest dont worry and its good to have a twist lolz

yes i would and it sounds very interesting